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Writer’s Name: Tracie Esterling
Reader’s Name: Frankie Lee
What is the thesis statement? If there isn’t one you can identify, sum up what you think the main idea of the paper is and suggest a possible thesis.
That Telemedicine has many possibilities and pitfalls for our patients and physicians; once we overcome our pitfalls, telemedicine will have endless possibilities.
Do a quick post draft outline of the paper by making a list below of the thesis, followed by the first sentence of paragraphs 2 onward (you can copy and paste the sentences in a list below). Looking at this post draft outline, do you see a clear focus on the article that the paper is responding to? Are there any body paragraphs that seem to slide off focus? Suggest areas where the topic sentences need work. Also, note any paragraphs that start with quotations, as that means there are topic sentence ideas missing from the paper.
Thesis – although telemedicine has many pitfalls if we can overcome these things then we will only benefit in the end
Social barriers like not having wi-fi connections
Privacy – patients and physicians need to make sure they are utilizing HIPAA compliant applications when utilizing smartphones.
What specific evidence does the writer provide to explain his/her main points? List examples below.
. Patients also receive coaching, education and checks for medication adherence (Koury, 2015).
Other pitfalls can include privacy, social barriers, coverage for telemedicine visits, and patients not having access to Wi-Fi connections.
What do you like best about this paper? Why?
I like this paper because I had no idea what telemedicine is so I learned something new.
I also the fact that everything was quoted and she listed the pitfalls of telemedicine but discussed how if how we worked on these telemedicine can be something beneficial.
What are three things (other than grammatical errors) that the writer could do to improve this paper? Please be specific. Do not say “nothing.” Everyone’s paper can be improved in some way.
Try to focus on some ways telemedicine.
Give more examples of how telemedicine can help if used in the future